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1 Headlines: Exercise 13 on Thu Jan 21, 2016 12:05 pm

Hi All,
I finally completed Exercise 13, which asks us to write 25 Headlines for our product. I chose Basketball Yoga Blast - From the Information Packet, I know that prospects are generally corporate successes, family-oriented people between 35-70 (both women and men) who know basketball, who want to be healthy and have fun, but who are constrained for time. I'd appreciate any feedback. Thanks!


1. You Got Game. At Work, You Bring It. Now Bring It To The Court In Just 30 Minutes a Day With These 6 Revolutionary Workouts Proven to Increase Strength, Flexibility, and Endurance.  
2. Be a Success at Aging. Act Now to Begin These 6 Revolutionary Workouts Proven to Increase Flexibility, Strength, and Endurance in Just 30 Minutes a Day.
3. Does Height Equal Power? Start Standing Taller Today With These 6 Revolutionary 30-Minute Workouts Proven to Improve Posture, Build Strength, and Increase Flexibility.
4. Your New Bathing Suit Bod Is A Bonus. Claim It Today with These 6 Revolutionary 30-Minute Workouts Proven to Tone Muscles and Burn Fat.
5. Yoga Purists Be Damned. Add These Heart-Pumping Basketball Drills to Your Routine Today and Turn Up the Energy with these 6 Proven 30-Minute Workouts.  
6. Act Now to Dribble, Stretch, and Tone Your Way to a Healthy Body in Just 30 Minutes a Day.
7. You’re a Finesse Player at Work. Now Be a Finesse Player on the Court in Just 30 Minutes a Day with These 6 Heart-Pumping Workouts.
8. These 6 Workouts are the Difference between Shooting a Few Hoops and Bringing the House Down. Act Now to Claim These Proven 30-Minute Workouts Proven to Increase Agility, Strength, and Endurance.
9. Basketball Drills Increase Endurance. A Yoga Body Is Lean, Defined, and Limber. Act Now To Do Both With These Six 30-Minute Workouts. You Can Thank Us Later From the Bedroom.
10. I Did Yoga Before It Was Cool. 40 Years Later, I Owe My NBA Career and My Health to These 6 Revolutionary 30-Minute Workouts Proven to Increase Strength, Ability, and Endurance.
11. These Two Basketball All-Stars Cordially Invite You to Test Their 6 Proven 30-Minute Workouts. Become Their Personal Trainee Now.
12. Forget the Incense and Flowery Language. We’ll Make You Sweat Now in Just 30-Minutes a Day with These 6 Heart-Pumping Workouts.
13. You’re a Baller. Prove It Today With These 6 High-Octane Workouts that Firm, Burn, Stretch, and Balance Your Body in Just 30 Minutes a Day.
14. Swish. Nothin’ But Net. Act Now to Become the All-Star of Your Local Court in Just 30 Minutes a Day with these 6 Strength-Building Workouts.  
15. A Carefree You Is a Happy You. Start Reducing Stress Today with these 6 Proven 30-Minute Workouts. Your Family Will Thank You.
16. Act Now to Burn Away Stress in Just 30 Minutes a Day with these 6 Revolutionary Workouts Proven to Increase Mental Clarity and Endurance.
17. Remember How You Felt at 25? Regain the Flexibility, Strength, and Endurance of Your Youth in Just 30 Minutes a Day with these 6 Revolutionary Workouts.
18. Every Day You Have Plenty of Chances to Get Angry or Stressed. Act Now to Give Your Family the Gift of a Carefree You with these 6 Family-Fun 30-Minute Workouts.
19. The 6 a.m. Alarm Clock, the Working-Lunch, the Hour-Long Commute, It’s All for Them . . . Your Family. Why Not Have Some Fun and Improve Your Quality Time with these 6 Family-Fun 30-Minute Workouts.
20. Your Family Deserves a Little One-on One. Find Out How to Make It Happen Today with these 6 Family-Fun 30-Minute Workouts.
21. Say Hello to the Next Basketball All-Star. You. Act Now to Claim these 6 Revolutionary 30-Minute Workouts Proven to Increase Strength, Flexibility, and Endurance.
22. Do You Want to Look Good Naked? Act Now to Claim These 6 Revolutionary 30-Minute Workouts Proven to Tone Muscle and Burn Fat
23. Do You Compete with Video Games and TV for Your Family’s Attention? Act Now Enjoy a Home-Court Advantage with these 6 Family-Fun 30-Minute Workouts.
24. Basketball Beats Yoga Boredom. Add These Heart-Pumping Drills to Your Routine Today and Turn Up the Energy with these 6 Proven 30-Minute Workouts.
25. Become Your Family’s Go-To Guy for Fun. Act Now to Enjoy These 6 Family-Fun 30-Minute Workouts.

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2 Re: Headlines: Exercise 13 on Thu Jan 21, 2016 12:24 pm

Jenn,

This is after a first read-through. I'll come back t this later, but I have to say that there were a few that jumped out at me. I'm not sure if they could be improved by a little mix-and-match, but I absolutely LOVED the first sentence of this:

     Yoga Purist Be Damned!
and most of this:
     I Did Yoga Before It Was Cool. 40 Years Later, I Owe My NBA Career and My Health to These 6 Revolutionary       30-Minute Workouts Proven to Increase Strength, Ability, and Endurance. 
However, I would take the 40 Years Later, out because it's somewhat confusing and sounds almost as if the writer STARTED his NBA career 40 years later. (How old would it make him?)


Another one that I liked was:
       These Two Basketball All-Stars Cordially Invite You to Test Their 6 Proven 30-Minute Workouts. Become Their Personal Trainee Now
My only qualm is slight. I'm wondering if it is inclusive enough of ALL your prospective customers.


But WOW! Actually, many of these were pretty strong.


Best,
Jill



Last edited by Jill Arnel on Thu Jan 21, 2016 12:28 pm; edited 1 time in total (Reason for editing : careless typos and the format screwed up.)

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3 I agree with Jill on Fri Jan 22, 2016 5:38 pm

Jennifer,

I was SO impressed with your extensive list of different headlines. WOW! I couldn't do what you did. You're so creative! Most of them are winners. I agree with Jill's comments.

Kind regards,

Eve Heidi

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4 Re: Headlines: Exercise 13 on Mon Jan 25, 2016 9:53 am

Thanks Jill and Eve!
I still have a lot to work on, but I'm surprised I actually came up with 25 - that was the hardest part!

Jill - Thank you for your added feedback - the NBA player I'm using is Kareem Abdul-Jabar - he's retired from the NBA, but credits yoga for his long career.

Jenn

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5 Re: Headlines: Exercise 13 on Mon Jan 25, 2016 10:12 am

Jenn,
Very clever!
Smile
Jill

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